How should my audience respond?

As a response to my short film, I want my audience to :

• ask questions
• feel shocked
• feel uneasy

Summary of plot narrative (version 1)

Set in a surburban household, a seemingly happy teenage relationship ends in tragedy. Intercepted with flashbacks showing the more cheerful moments between Susie and Mark, the full horror of their destroyed harmony will gradually become clear. What could drive a young girl to murder? How could an innocent relationship end so tragically?

Feedback

It works. Possibly a little more background information needed about characters and their relationships, and the locations (e.g. fixed point). Also, style of film not made clear enough.

Summary of plot narrative (version 2)

With the action centred around one surburban household, the film explores how a 2 year long teenage relationship can suddenly end in tragedy. Intercepted with flashbacks of 18 year olds Susie and Mark in happier times, the full extent of the horrific conclusion to their once innocent relationship gradually becomes clear, leaving you questioning how a young girl can turn to murder, and what could possibly end a typical teenage relationship so gruesomely?